Quote:
Originally Posted by Minds
Quick 10 for yea Atomic, gl.
I’m so quick with the tongue that every cunt in your family will cum when I spit//
Screamin “Minds please fill my clit with a load of adverbs and adjectives!!”//
-----This was OK. Not very creative, and basically a self hype line which is kind of useless in a text battle.
I know…those first two lines were sick, so I’ll give you 5 min. to fap off to my shit//
And If I continue like this, you’ll probably develop carpal tunnel in your wrists!!//
-----This was cool with the punch + it was set up nicely. GJ
Compared to you…I’m a God, Legend, and Champ and whatever else is synonymous//
I’ll beat you so bad, your reflection will hide so you don’t have to face your consequences//
-----Legend/champ aren't synonymous with God, sorry to be a stickler but could've used better word choice. The second line was ok, kinda funny but kind of played with "ill beat you so bad"
And leave you fightin for oxygen, while I strangle you, till you lose consciousness!!//
The way I flex my dominance probably got you thinkin that I roid up my confidence//
-----This was cool, good wordplay
I’m homicidal with the pencil, spilling blood when I write like my lyrics was menstrual//
Man-u-scripted and stenciled, while I’m forever original cause Minds is all mental //
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------Don't really get how minds being mental keeps it original, but nonetheless, cool closer. Stretched rhyme also.
Quote:
Originally Posted by Atomic
oLawd,
um.
do i feel ur bars? lemme answer that faggot...
NO, i dont mind. but i'm fuckin pissed u dropped that wack shit^
-----ummm, this didn't rhyme. Was this just dialogue?
leave 'em bummin & hurt grab the teC i'm not bluffin i'll merk
then put the trident to 'em, fucker it'll really gum up your works.
-----That was cool wordplay, I enjoyed this line.
ur quick with the bars? idc i'll still let the hollows fly till ur heads full,
bitch told me he'd wing it. no surprise i'm not feeling anything i red, bull.
----This was another cool line "wing it/red bull" I caught that. But gun bars are weak, imo.
this faggots lame, he'd have to pay 100k to get a dime to just bone,
if i'm being chauvinistic, it's the only way a chick would say she has a mind of her own.
-----Nice, good wordplay here. Work on adding in multi's imo
gunplay, sons gay the shotty will blow.. you're hardly a pro,
not fucking exercise advice when i say i'll end mind- body & soul
---DOPE line, you already know.
bloaw.
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Basically:
Minds: Some good punches, a couple lines that were kind of weak, imo. Closer had a stretched rhyme, could've came harder.
Atomic: Cool punches, gun bars were bad imo, but you had good wordplay. Lacked multi's but ehh, no biggie.
MVGT: Atomic