I really enjoyed this piece as well. You have a lot of meaning wit the things you write, which is not something you will find all the time. Just like the "Destruction" piece you had wrote, this one had good rhyming and the flow was on point for sure. So good that I could read it at almost any pace I could of wanted. One thing I like about you is how you incorporated a dope rhyme scheme to help you convey your message. At the same time, it was so strong that you could of expressed your content in the simplest form and it still would of been just as good as long as you weren't forcing anything, that's all that's important. But it definetly was easier to grasp the way you did it. Very well written and I thought you had some nice lines in there. My favorite one was when you said,
decay it would as if made of wood, so sad it was,
to notice over years this cliche of evil inhabit us.
savage thus, its bad enough, noticed it goes not,
he who cast the first stone is below his own rock
That was sick lol! But this wasn't bad at all. Hoping to read more from you at some point.
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