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Old 12-12-2024, 11:48 AM   #8
ACTIVATE SELF
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John Dillinger:
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Ya whole personality is giving it up, lil welfare sleazy hoe
Slut’s taken more Shots to the Back lately than that healthcare CEO

That was nice. Relevant and well executed.

You just know that shit is stank, like a moldy green cheddar scent
Seen this bitch open her legs & been repulsed by grilled cheese ever since

Graphic, Kind of funny. Good set up and execution.

Loud and ugly, no amount of makeup could hide the shame
Ain’t talkin jacking styles when I say no one tryna ride ya Wave

Solid name-play.

You should be taken out, of this world, not some horny datin’ shit
Rail u then toss you Underground, that’s word to your shorty Harriet

Underground railroad, rail's a double entendre, Harriet Tubman bar. I see the play, but it didn't hit as hard as it could've.

Them voters musta been drunk, how u champ a league, some luck dude
Cuz u ain’t Bomb Bae - it just takes gallons of that gin to wanna fuck

It's was almost there but didn't quite deliver. I get the play on words, but the impact was null.
Etherwave:
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Another goofy ass boy coming for me by attacking my sex,
starting my villain arc imma be worse than lex.

The diss didn't land. It felt more like a flex, than a punch.

This nigga John Dillinger a pililgrim, come to pillage like his people.
It's just in his blood and I came to spill it like my equals.

Same as above.

He a nobody. Imma put So many holes in this boy til he see through.
He already a ghost. He a pig, I'm starting the roast.

You have to be more creative and imagnitive with your insults. 0% damage was dealt to your opponent. 5% at best.

I'm a wig out and rip out his throat.
I'm known to trip without letting shit go.
I wouldn't fuck you you should already know,
you acting like diddy and it's starting to show.

This might have some bite to it in person, depending on how you deliver it or the theatrics of your performance. But in text-form it has zero impact.

Vote:
Ether's layout was going to ensure a loss from the start. Plus she had no real punches or personals of note. JD had a much more cohesive verse with solid punches and humor. Easy win.

Ether, you're a fine topical writer but clearly new to the text scene. I'm sure you'll improve with more battles under your belt.
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