this was pretty nuts. Word choice was excellent. I like how you don't dwell on metaphors at all, it gives your verse a more directed feel and strengthens your argument, like you're making a statement instead of going for artistic merit.
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deemed a demon just for reasoning the Lord’s way
sons of atom and evolution sent to month of may
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I loved the syllabic repetition here
There were some parts where the schemes were lacking and the rhyming fell off, and a few places where I wish you had kept a rhyme going and didnt. just some technicalities, it was a really good read... definitely can tell this was a fully-formed drop.
is this HarMonica? anyways, welcome to AOB, stick around a bit. Keep keyin.