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Etherwave:
This was an unexpected take on the topic, but it works well enough. I dug it. I just watched season one of Fallout recently and liked it a lot so I was happy to go back to that post apocalyptic theme here. I really liked the reference to leaving our fate to AI hahaha, very relevant. The alien line threw me - everything else about this pointed to humanity causing its own downfall, and then there was just this one reference to aliens which didn’t fit IMO. Either needed to be omitted or explored way more. Maybe you didn’t mean it as literal aliens. Idk. Anywayyyyy. There were lots of nice turns of phrase.

Everyone is adjusting as well as expected.
Alone in their sections, memories on reel with too much time for self reflection. The battle of trying to understand the failures of something omnipotent and omnipresent.

^highlight.

I’d love to see you using more syllables in your rhymes. It would really elevate your writing to the next level IMO.

Fraze:
Hello! I’m not familiar with you or your writing but I was very pleasantly surprised to instantly recognize that you’ve obviously got some skill and experience here. Flow, rhymes, thematic vocab all there in the first stanza before I even got really into the piece as a whole. Yay. Okay, now I’ve read it all through. Very cool take. I don’t think I’ve seen it done before like that actually - a handful of short verses from different perspectives on the same topic. The “Morgan freeman” narrator voice giving us a more detached/factual/scientific reflection on great white sharks, the shark himself, and then an attack survivor - which brought it home with the topic image. And all of them had distinct voices. Yeah I fucked with this, thought it was pretty dope.

Voting for fraze. Thought the connection to the topic was better/better explored, and the multi syllable rhymes are probably more important to me that most I guess but it is a big factor.