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Old 06-26-2013, 06:41 PM   #6
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good use of vocab to strengthen this piece and weaken it so to speak...flow was on point...really liked this line as it stood out for me:

soaring fluidly through groupings of acoustical pressure points.

the word choices were good for the brain chemistry you were relating too. props...verse two expanded a bit on how you muster your revelry or spits...felt greasy in some points and strong in others...


The way I see it, using those Oxford words as rhyme pieces really gives a written a twista presentation due to the syl. count....just a thought


anyhow, sometimes I have deeper thoughts that cover other areas of writing on a feed, sometimes not...today these are my thoughts

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