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Old 10-22-2024, 12:44 PM   #16
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Mmlp - I really dislike existential rambles, I didn’t like it when Sacrifice did it and I didn’t like it here. Not to mention you used tropes like alcohol and that weird Grim Reaper twist at the end, which is very much a trope in my book. There was a strange disconnect to this concept. You went on a tangent about life but then it turns out that it was for nothing as the dialogue wasn’t about/with god but death.

Symetrik - this was like an outline of a story. I did like the imagery packed in there and only wished it was more developed as a story. So another death shit. It was a boring undeveloped one at that.

Vote mmlp, as much as I hate existential diatribes, I felt mmlp was more developed. Although sym had better imagery, he did not do much with it besides killing the character in the end, something MMLP also did so a wash in that respect.

V/ mmlp
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