Hmm. Okay.
MMLP. This was alright. A little underwhelming to be completely honest. I dunno if you rushed it just to show up or if you didn't take your opponent seriously but it feels like you just posted the rough draft and skipped the editing process because it's pretty straight forward and simple. Ending was a little too on the nose imo.
Sym. This was brief. So my feedback shall be too. The flow was a lot smoother / quicker paced than MMLP which made the read better but the concept needed to be stretched out more and needed more depth to it. It started and finished before anything could really take place.
It was basically technique vs flow. Didn't care for either concept. I'll give it to MMLP for having a cohesive beginning, middle and end.
MMLP
__________________
Quote:
|
Originally Posted by Wuxia
You're a really talented writer. And I've only ever said that to Baron Mynd.
|
|