mvgt Dom
as it always goes for my votes on Candy's pieces... I enjoy that you are dedicated to the way you wanna write, and I encourage you to keep doing it,
but you will always be losing my vote because of it - shit just flops all over the place, is chaotic and not structured in the way I hope it to be, and even with my best attempt, I can't FIND the structure.
sigh.
Dom -
best lines:
The world becomes a blur in the grip of centripetal motion -
Thoughts circling inwards until you’re too dizzy to focus
Emotions like faded photos in drawer that never gets opened
Hidden in their quiet prison. Unseen, and better unspoken
there were other dope lines, but this was smooth af. very clear connection from line to line, and mostly great flow + great rhyme.
I also like how you connected this to the topic, less literal, and more a play on "detachment" - dope.
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