MVGT Etherwave
headless -
best lines:
... how can I figure out the sentences
and ponder everything around me and our interconnectedness
The birds and the bees, the worms and the trees
The dirt and the leaves ...
unfortunately, the rest of the piece didn't hold water to this section - it overall felt like "these bad things happened, I'm totally pondering the meaning of it, omg maybe I've been dead the whole time? or just metaphorically?" without actually giving any meat to it... or a reason to invest or care. if there's anything I've learned, it's to go slow and work exposition for smooth reads (especially in topical formats). I still struggle with jumping around tho, so I get it.
Ether -
best lines:
-shrug- nothing hit it for me, sorry.
I think this lacked a lot in the rap/flow/lyrical stylings we have expected to see here... but I worry too that leaning too heavily into "IT'S NOT RAP IT DOESN'T COUNT" detracts from what we're trying to achieve,
and with that in mind, MVGT Etherwave
the overall structure and story was more clear and in a single space - my interpretation, at least (a girl, abused, creates a safe internal space for the parts of herself that are innocent, deserving to be loved, and she keeps them in that space until it kills them - so that the innocent self can die in peace.)
whereas headless covered a lot of ground, but too quickly and without giving me time to connect to key items - why do I care about this character? I think her dad hated her cuz her mom died in child birth, but the dad killed himself and part of her died with him?
I definitely got the gist but... I wanted more.
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