Candy - I actually appreciate your abstract nonsense. Does it make for a fun read? No. It’s a jumble of Of word salad that is nearly impossible to decipher
“the wind blows, swifts into shivers of legalization“
Like wtf? As a result I have no idea what u are talking about and don’t want to overthink on a weekend.
Dom - I diggit. Just a bit confused on how I should make out the line about blurred photos locked in a drawer. Nice and poetic but it made little sense to me. How would the author know the photo was blurred if it’s locked up. Then you formed a whole concept on it but my mind was distracted to the original inquiry. No big deal but word I like this. It’s poetic without being weird like candy.
Vote/Dom. Just a better substantial effort.
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