"He had always been such a benevolent ghost-all these years he spent irrelevant to a malevolent host.
His fears geared away from the evidence shown. (His) face mirrors how he's still stuck in his throes.
(He) used to be king. At least a small prince on his throne. Now he's just a cry that got stuck in (His) throat.
^ That was incredible. I put rhyme schemes together better than anyone here so I understand and appreciate what you did there. In addition to the rhyme scheme it was just very well written. You didn't use words randomly, every word was relevant to the topic and progressed the narrative.
The whole verse was good but those first few lines really showed your talent as a writer.
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He listens to voices inside of his mind
Explicit and poisonous violent crime.
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