[Etherwave]

Symetrik

I really love your story. Besides a few flow issues it's without any major flaws. Two things from me, <the birds and beasts that had longed to be feared by the drunken hunters who would walk through the trees.> I was thrown off by through. I just think it's one too many words to keep the nice flow you had. Maybe something like, "the drunken hunters who haunt(ed) the trees." Or something. But love the way it flows. And also <it was archaic and dark magic> such a beautiful line. I believe taking the and out would've done more justice. But nonetheless, a beautifully written story.

Mike wrecka

This was Great! Coherent. Flows well. An interesting story. Not quite as tidy as your opponent but that doesn't take anything away.

All in all, my only problem, that's not really a problem for me because I don't know anything, lol, is I feel like neither of you really connected with the picture in a way that truly inspired you. That being said

Mvgt symetrik. With neither truly giving much of the topic, all I can go off is which one flowed better, had better vocabulary, and lines that stood out.


May I add, I honestly don't know much about writing other than letting out what my spirit has to say. I have no official education on the subject specifically, so I'm just participating to keep the passion of a dying art alive and hope everyone is happy with their pieces because I think they are all expressions from the universe, and there's no right or wrong answer.

Good Luck Guys!