This battle was pretty underwhelming, Aero’s ending was pretty funny but otherwise it was pretty wack, sort of a “look at me I’m being funny and self-deprecating fellow battlers” vibe to it. Lacks confidence in writing which is sad because Aero is a good writer but I don’t think he’ll ever give an effort in topical out of insecurity for starting the art too late, if he came with it he could reach dominate levels within a month or so.
Scar you had some decent portions but the dialogue was pretty clunky and doesn’t sound at all like real conversation or even an approximation thereof in rhyming format. The concept itself had something to it, going full circle, and even entertaining the notion of a hierophanic object in the candy bowl (my interpretation of it, I guess). Although it was a bit sloppy it was more well put together than aero’s.
V/ Scar
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