[Flow]

Originally Posted by Battle Hymens

I didn't put your name up cuz you're just another number to me
added to my statistics once I go ballistic and cut a MC
this is just in your face stuff not a punch
not a samurai, but test my klan you'll die... Ima shogun(show guns)
so I can paint wit guts and meat wit tha steal to use to rape tha weak
lol no
watch how Ima tape this geek.. cryin as she speaks cuz I'm dick
n' SHE GOT INTO SOMETHING TOO DEEP, best believe I'ma sandm freak
this was nearly ok, but wording was awful
cuz I take control and start to mold what you're heart scolds
in this battle scene you're too old
lol....was that a bar...it was really wank no offence
and them tities i see.. need to be fucked some more
admit it, you're not ready for war as I bathe in gore
in your face again no punch no direction
after I pry them staples off and get them torn again
like you're striving to be a born again, this son
no punch no set up unless this is a set up for the next bar...
will make your spirit holy cuz I fathered you
an armed appeared out of my mother's womb after
lol this is becoming painful, these are like 4-6 lines before a punch an then a punch never comes...
my father had said she had nearly swallowed you
so I can't die.. and You.. can't rhyme so dont bother wit it
want to flow, biyatch? just cuz I'm dick and you want slobber wit it?
the close was probably the closest you had to anything and it took 8 lines to get there....
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=7467

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=7723

you need to either start doing some swag and flow battles or topicals where I think you can actually showcase the skills you have. You seem to want to do your own thing and your own style which I applaud because there are way to many people who just recycle old concepts with a slight twist to seem fresh an it does got samey, but you have no scheme here. its just a lot of statements and in your face stuff, nearly no concepts or punchlines, an when your going to write like that I would at least want a mint bit of rhyming and internals etc but there was none of that - I will be amazed if you take the win.

OH AND THIS IS SUPPOSED TO BE 10 LINES - I COUNT 17

Originally Posted by 2 Beautiful

Open your eyes before you try & come at me punk
learn how drive, I'll send your shit straight up to the dump
meh weak but directed
Stop acting like you cool, everyone can see past that you actor
you bastard, you liar you lame actor, look at these factors,
......
you not going get any girls like this,
That's not your wish.
That was a garbage diss,
I might throw a fit.
good for you but this isn't a punch
you done made me nauseous like I just took a hit
Cuz that was the was the worst rap I've ever heard in my life,
But I'll eat you up like your family & pork fried rice
you not nice.
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Sadly this was a close battle....im speechless....

Vote 2Beaut simply for the first bar having some sort of direction