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Originally Posted by Wordz AhGod
I'm not here to mince words, just here to make this bitch lose
you won't need a replacement.. my uppercuts will raise his kids too.
Let's all notice that "mince words" is a near vowel/syllable match w/ "bitch lose" & "kids too"...Still trying to figure out the uppercuts wordplay but it Sounds cool?
I'll see em' at the office, make em sleep when I empty the tank
he'll hear a "CLAP CLAP".. n get lifted out his seat like he's expecting a prank
pretty cool phonetically, and, while the closing simile seems to "take a little sting" out of the initial onomonopia of gunfire, it's not a bad play; just perhaps a little stretched out on the thought process. I donno? Don't love but don't hate either
I'm here out of boredom, he thinks he'll get clout n some glory
signed up to get molested n victimized, those initials became his origin story.
Youch. I think this is real strong...can relate to the opening phrase, decent 4 syll rhyme (altho it's not supercomplex)...That's ok, it hits and could hurt.
I mush rappers on tracks, anything from this bum is forced
Getting too old to run circles. I'll cut off ur legs n let the blood run its course.
Decent violence flip...would have loved a little fancy 'internal' with "mush rappers on tracks?" Just asking.
MV got me acting like an old-school villain, s'why he's knowing he's dead
I be like "why aorta".. then I squeeze and stop the oxygen going to his head.
At this point I'll let other voters and the rest of the site decide if this is a good wordplay or kinda corny and flat...Personally I'm in the middle
My aim is well known.. your lying if you say your floss higher
God'll bury you head first, arms out.. the execution'll be a crossfire.
Sounds good and another violence wordplay flip. I mean that's kinda what battles are so I got no problem seeing another one here.
we have shit in common tho, we both fuck ur girl but I give her pleasure
LOTB for me. Only half a bar I don't need to see a lame rhyme-finish payoff...This is harsh and effective...I'm sure this concept has been used in history but Wordz worded it here then followed by continuing the pleasure/size joke:
says she likes urs cos the big ones hurt..
..now ur in the bathroom taking desperate measures.
sorry, went 14.
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Solid stuff man. Apparently you still got it.
A few FIRE in there as well...though I believe if you keep honing you could punch out even better...might have been 1 or 2 in there that were avg/meh.
Just a personal note, I always grant the 24 hr ext...PPl have families, kids, jobs, yeah it's only 14 lines but you know? Having a battle is better than NOT having a batttle. For the culture. Still your choice, Wordz on exceptions. But I'd argue my side.
Regarding your 2011 Track w/ Celph...epic/legendary, man. Too bad it was 12 years ago and now you hate on my epic Wise cover (which I doubt any textcee could match)...
Anyway, hope you get a full battle if you're in next week (3).
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