[Pharaohs Army]

Fine.
I linked it already, but

UP

"Sandra?"

This...OF ALL THINGS, THIS
is my "K.O.", MMLP... lol.

I don't know. Maybe they already knew it was 6.5 yrs ago.

Done.
I just read it again, I'm done.
I mean, other than the last line:
STG, if I'd wife'd a single mother or was dating one...
MIGHT'VE just ended it all after reading this.
It was close. It was getting close.
I can laugh about it now.

Fuck you all. OF COURSE I'D "UP" IT
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for fucks sake

As their favourites are chimed, bursting out phrases and lines and making them rhyme
hope u die mmlp

respect brahs~


***Edit
Alright, a line of "real feed" before I log off....to go with my self-absorbed "personal relation to the verse" comments above...lol:

As their favourites are chimed, bursting out phrases and lines and making them rhyme
obviously i like this line...did not KNOW i subconsciously bit it in my 2nd audio track (not verbatim but the scheme)
With really nothing to state he’s juggled his way to acquire a place to retire.
uh-huhhhh...................
Had once taken a shine but now his characters died, up in smoke in blazes of fire
for lack of a better word i just think "blazes of fire" is such a dope phrase; FIRE phrase...more good MMLP uber-rhyming...love the simple statement that "his characters died"...really great thing to describe any writer or entertainer...
but he hopes that the lions are tamed and that’s what’s providing a ray of some light
Alright let's nitpick....cuz this is like one of the few knocks for this uber-multi style.....who in the world EVER says "ray of some light" or "rays of some light"...the "some" is nothing more than syllable-mulit-match filler here and, careful, can kill a vibe or flow. Aside for the troublesome "some" the rhyme itself (at least in AMERICAN/USA...is kinda stretchy/reachy...not as slick as the 3 previous...and yes the "closers" or after a "long string" I DO often go for a bend or a wiggle, but this is...well, as u can see,, the one nitpick!...edit yeah I don't like the rhyme. Just don't like it; you friggen brits. Maybe it fits for you.
Guess my suggestion would be:
well there's a lot of possible fixes (if ur not gonna change the end rhyme)
but he hopes that the lions are tamed and that’s what’s providing a ray of some light
-....yikes.....I had a lot of possibilities, involving the first word "but", perhaps a comma /and/or pause after "what's" or "providing"....nonono scratch that--
BOTTOM LINE...the fix is you make it "hesitate" and then say Ray of Light and fucking make it fit w/ the previous 3 multis just fucking make it happen as a rapper....if that involves re-wording earlier parts of the line then you do that too.....

Lol, did I tame you fucking lions yet? Is that my consolation MMLP? Is that my hope/optimism. That they've been TAMED. LOL....
No. I shall goad the lions with the most choice cuts of meat.... I shall dangle said meats (no homo)....and we all shall feast.... &by that i mean the 5-10 active writers here
BYE mmlp

***Edit #8,726 since February
Or if u dont wanna hesitate and chop the multi shorter...u say "some Rays of Light" instead of rays of some light!!! that might be the winner.
i donno figure it out losers

fuck all of our lives especially mine & MMLPs for this verse lol~