definitely got an eminem "my fault" vibe right at the beginning, both from a content perspective and also the rhymes/flow...
after that it's more clearly a Zen piece, and jesus man, for almost 10 years ago now your mechanics were pretty impressive...
I don't have much to say about this really...death@the end, meh, what isn't cliche now? It's the way it had to go, even if readers might guess that's where it's headed...as long as it's DONE OK, which I thought it was, I don't have a problem...
You remind me a lot of me - stylistically w/ some things. Not gonna get into specifics...Your EARLY feeback/engagement with me on "nitty-gritty" text details, where to put a fucking comma or if this multi goes on the next line, &what have you...were critical - to me personally - and kept me engaged on the website when I could have easily given up or just did keys all my life...So thanks for that & being an early lime heavy-hitter.
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