Thought it was good for the most part.
Inspring BB wordings/phrasings/ bit contemplative, if you will.
KEPT my attention AND was good CONSISTENTLY through the end...
I've been getting ADD with longer pieces (including my own)...
So props for keeping the quality throughout...
I can only make you feel better, not fix your disease
medicine cabinet. reciting Nietzsche for the very last time
i’m not even fucking alive. pink matters’ as dead as our past
consummate mind. flesh pattern has nothing but scabs
Quatrain caught my eye for sure. Thought it was quite a powerful one...even without knowing what "pink matters'"is...STILL great four lines [thx]. Anyone can reference Nietzsche, but BB did it cleverly and the context around is fitting.
Uh, didn't "rap" it, but my eye and mind's ear thought the second half was "tighter" stylistically/flow-wise...where it starts...well...right where I quoted the quatrain!
To V's point...I didn't think it was a poor attempt at words for words sake or deadman... Thought it was a legit BB drop...Nice drop.
Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 02-27-2023 at 07:22 PM.
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