I liked this, you've put a hell of a lot of work in over the years and it shows. Practice doesn't make perfect but it definitely makes significant improvement.
Having said that, despite what the other two guys said, the flow was bumpy in places. You know I'm incredibly obsessed with wording and syllable count, so maybe I'm being harsh but I thought there were a few occasions where you said more than you needed to.
Liked it though, good verse.
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