rock - let's be honest, first line started playing green day in my head fuuuuuck outta here. I think the grammar was rough, focus on your concept was locked in. some good (maybe unintentional) wordplay, "equating to the balance" while the world seems to spin around him. I felt like a lot of the rhymes felt forced, unnatural and just "wellp this word rhymes so I'll shove it in somehow", tense changes, etc. no stand out lines to me.
pa - honestly, I love the opening. c-notes printed first in 1800s is a dope callout, but I wish things weren't capitalized - it makes stuff more clear but also draws the eye a little too hard and I lose focus on the piece as a whole to either appreciate or frown at the "hey look at this". "Empty dumpster present day‘less it contains in-testines" was absurdly fun, I read it like five times. best line, closely contended by "We’ve only traveled a century. We haven’t traveled dimensions. The quality - of the phoTOGraphy is somewhat, definitely, or never in question." but again the caps throw it a little.
rock had good steady connection to his concept but PA's abstractions and back and forth with the timing/location/etc. and far better grammar/wording sold it for me.
vote: PA
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