Civil - slow and abstract - feels pretty troll of a post, but the biggest issue I have with this is that you chose your own topic instead of using the topic provided. that feels DQ-able. as before, I struggle to see that you're taking this seriously, so if you are - I would just start posting in OM and not attending this - it's hard to give you cohesive feedback.
Dope - besides the grammar mistakes all over, this wasn't awful, it had a clear basis for the "snippet" (less a story) and was actually tied to the topic (in the sense that maybe you saw two hands touching, like a mother/daughter, or having a child is a form of bondage/hostage). the grammar made is really hard to read, but there wasn't really a hard eye roll moment so...
vote: Dope girl
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