First impression: great matchup here, definitely will see a rematch further down the road in the playoffs if both stay in. You two are definitely two of my favorite writers on the site. But honestly, this was a lot closer on paper than it was after reading. There’s a definitive winner here and it sadly wasn’t super close.
Universe - let me start this by saying that I never played Bioshock Infinite (only the original game) but I am keen on the story so that helped out, instead of this playing out like one of your more suspenseful pieces though it was pretty apparent the direction you were going in from the beginning you dropped some heavy hints early on and I don’t think that did you any favors, but I did enjoy the little journey that was laid out. This didn’t feel as cohesive as your usual stuff though, the two sections didn’t really feel like they connected too much and the scheme you unraveled once Comstock entered was impressive from a rhyming and technical aspect but I think it was kind of hard to follow? Also didn’t feel like people who didn’t play the games would completely be able to follow this, you usually do a good job of simplifying stuff and making your narrative more universal (hahaha) when you’re doing pop culture references. So I feel like you missed the mark a little bit here but this still a decent piece.
Scar - Glad to see you back first and foremost. I liked the direction you took this in but feel like the story was really discombobulated. On paper I like the concept of a vigilante type angel coming and cleaning the earth up on Christmas Eve I mean it’s cool, and I’m a sucker for a good vampire story (bam! I’m on a roll tonight) but this was rough and I could tell it was rushed even without you telling us in the end. The dialogue was messy and wasn’t really fitting the rhyme scheme very well, the climax left a lot to be desired too and I feel like if that type of stuff could have been sat on and fleshed out a little bit more we may have had a better result here but this just wasn’t a piece I rocked with very much. And I think almost all of that comes down to the fact that it had to be rushed to fit the deadline. It’s okay there’s bound to be missteps like this.
Overall was sort of underwhelmed by this one especially with the big names in it. Neither writer was in their top form this week but I think Universe had a better story and less missteps. So I’ll give it to him this week
V/Universe
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