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Old 12-12-2022, 12:14 PM   #5
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univ - solid verse as always, a little rereading rereading rereading to keep focused which can be rough but we patient. good flows. I think the ending was a lot weak than the first part.

scar - some sloppy, needed edits, hope you're feeling better. good imagery, clear to see where we were, great twist totally missed it, but the end plummeted hard.


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universe - at his best that's how it's done on point in every area

scar - some of this sounded reads like dialogue
its not rhymeable it lacked flow or ''bboyism'' in certain areas
i felt you killed momentum of some epic shit which made it read
like a story written in a book instead of a hip hop verse
but there were moments of brilliance in certain lines just wished it had more hiphop style then story style
my opinion

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