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Old 12-05-2022, 02:00 PM   #11
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This was solid as usual. Technically spot on but it's just kind of a dumb narrative... I don't really get how you tied this picture to Tyson and a gorilla...? Boxing is literally the only connection here. But I guess that looseness was sort of expected because Soule disappeared and once you realized it was a free win you sort of went on autopilot. I would've understood that but you posted an update to your verse so I expected things to wrap up a little better in the 2nd draft, or have some kind of revelation but it just kind of fell flat and ended.

Regardless, entertaining show.
It was unfinished, to be honest. As time drew on after the extension was granted, it became clearer he wasn’t showing and I just kinda stopped jotting down anything. The build up had to be pretty long because, at least in my opinion, Tyson vs a Gorilla would end pretty fucking aptly within round one when the gorilla tears him limb from limb and eats his arms.

That said, the gorilla would be DQ’d for doing so in process and, thus, Tyson would have won the bout. Even though he was dead.


I found that fun. :-)
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