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Universe · 12-04-2022, 10:54 PM

Diablo:

This was solid as usual. Technically spot on but it's just kind of a dumb narrative... I don't really get how you tied this picture to Tyson and a gorilla...? Boxing is literally the only connection here. But I guess that looseness was sort of expected because Soule disappeared and once you realized it was a free win you sort of went on autopilot. I would've understood that but you posted an update to your verse so I expected things to wrap up a little better in the 2nd draft, or have some kind of revelation but it just kind of fell flat and ended.

Regardless, entertaining show.

12-04-2022, 10:54 PM	#10
Universe Everything's Connected Join Date: Nov 2017 Location: Niagara Falls, Canada Posts: 1,001 Battle Record: 19-8 Champed - Guerrilla Writing League(2x) - GWL Picture challenge(2x) - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 10178706	Diablo: This was solid as usual. Technically spot on but it's just kind of a dumb narrative... I don't really get how you tied this picture to Tyson and a gorilla...? Boxing is literally the only connection here. But I guess that looseness was sort of expected because Soule disappeared and once you realized it was a free win you sort of went on autopilot. I would've understood that but you posted an update to your verse so I expected things to wrap up a little better in the 2nd draft, or have some kind of revelation but it just kind of fell flat and ended. Regardless, entertaining show. __________________ ..Passed the Present and Future..