hmm. i tried reading this to the instrumental but it just wasn't clicking. i would love to hear u actually spit this over the beat and post that. while i was reading i was getting an oldschool nas vibe to it for sure. you can tell u were diggin this track or the instrumental and it put in you in that NY state of mind haha. Overall yes i liked it but i can't really tell if its matching the beat or not. the bar lengths varied a little too much to get an idea of if you were supposed to spit it fast or slow. know what i mean?? if your gonna post TEXT Lyrics to match audio beats that shit has to be consistent or its impossible to get the rhythm properly as a reader. you had super long lines and super short lines mixed all together. anyways dude keep doing ur thing and take the plunge, record some shit!!
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