Netcees - View Single Post - ROUND ONE: #3 DOMINATE vs #6 MIKE WRECKA OPEN FOR VOTES DOM WINS 4-1

Eviction · 08-30-2022, 12:25 PM

@Dominate

The rhyme scheme in the opening was average, it wasn't anything special, I can see you are going for storytelling right off in the beginning, the imagery in the beginning section was on point, the way you are describing events. is really nice, and is usually something that gets me to read more, I think the rhymes in the second stanza were a little odd, I get the scheme there as you’re not going for the typical end rhyme scheme, I would expect more complex schemes if you’re going that route, I think the highlight of this is you keep the same rhyme scheme throughout the entire thing, and each section had a key take-away.
@Mike Wrecka
I must admit you could have shortened your lines some to make for an easier read, that opening line I am on the fence about because you’re basically saying the same thing, but saying it in a different way, makes it sound like you’re trying to stretch the line farther, you’re storytelling wasn’t as elaborate as dominate, but you killed it with your rhyme schemes, “improve and soothe neurosis” that whole section was dope.

This is a close battle for sure, I think mike wrecka would have ran away with this if his piece was longer, but you can ignore dominate and the way he was able to tell a descripted story, dominate had the better rhyme schemes this season, but I didn’t see that from him, maybe he’s trying to prove that you don’t need to spam multies and be over the top with rhymes to end up with a decent piece, it does take away from the actual story, Dom’s was more character driven, and mike was more about him, with less back story.

Going to have to give this to Dominate, on content value alone.

08-30-2022, 12:25 PM	#5
Eviction Detained Join Date: Oct 2020 Posts: 1,838 Battle Record: 16-11 Rep Power: 0	@Dominate The rhyme scheme in the opening was average, it wasn't anything special, I can see you are going for storytelling right off in the beginning, the imagery in the beginning section was on point, the way you are describing events. is really nice, and is usually something that gets me to read more, I think the rhymes in the second stanza were a little odd, I get the scheme there as you’re not going for the typical end rhyme scheme, I would expect more complex schemes if you’re going that route, I think the highlight of this is you keep the same rhyme scheme throughout the entire thing, and each section had a key take-away. @Mike Wrecka I must admit you could have shortened your lines some to make for an easier read, that opening line I am on the fence about because you’re basically saying the same thing, but saying it in a different way, makes it sound like you’re trying to stretch the line farther, you’re storytelling wasn’t as elaborate as dominate, but you killed it with your rhyme schemes, “improve and soothe neurosis” that whole section was dope. This is a close battle for sure, I think mike wrecka would have ran away with this if his piece was longer, but you can ignore dominate and the way he was able to tell a descripted story, dominate had the better rhyme schemes this season, but I didn’t see that from him, maybe he’s trying to prove that you don’t need to spam multies and be over the top with rhymes to end up with a decent piece, it does take away from the actual story, Dom’s was more character driven, and mike was more about him, with less back story. Going to have to give this to Dominate, on content value alone.