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Old 08-14-2022, 11:55 PM   #10
Adverse
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Dominate:
Nothing but trash that ur flexin’… But I had to laugh at that mention -
I nicknamed your bitch cement - found her wet, put a hand in & left a lasting impression
^ dope flip here bro

I’d never seen a wider snatch … like she allowed five guys at a time to smash
Had trains run through that British tunnel. Now she spread her legs like “Mind The Gap”
^ lol this was good

Pull up next to you in the whip... The crew got got 4s to unload
My dogs sweeping your car - you get sent to the other side like border control
^ alright here. See the concept but felt like it could use some retweaking I guess?

Anyone I’m in a bout with, I’ll outwit. You should sense the danger & leave
Bro my bars the same as your mouth is – realllll creative angles with teeth
^ lmao I fucked with this

And I killed you in our last match. You can’t STILL think your writing is tight
With that approach, Ima ring your bell again... At this point it’s like riding a bike
^ decent to me.

Got the Uzi for your bitch ass. Trigger squeezing, heat pop
Keep acting Camp David... Ima let that Middle Eastern Piece Talk
^ decent had to Google

Dave:
I’m like Rocky in a movie when the vodkas runnin through me
So this Aussie boot-licker’s getting smashed without me offering a shooey
^ connection was okay but was something an American audience isn’t really going to know without googling

If he discussing his gat we know he’s just bluffing the facts
When his shit hit hardest it’s like mr marcus - fuckin nothing but cap
^ this is one I hate to admit that I get lol I’m not sure if everyone will know though. Decent connection


Im rolling out in the SUV if I’m gonna be cruising with friends
When This bogan ride in the Ute.. he’s been fuckin his students again..
^ lol alright decent

Hot tub and spa days for Dave’s wife, it doesn’t phase you when you paid right
Dom and his girl pool together too: for a McDonald’s saver menu date night
^ lol nice bro

So try and dress it up - you ain’t fuckin with the reaper
Cinderella story: I’ll see you at midnight when things get ugly with this sweeper
^ cool connection

Im feelin like a vulture in this league, picking off these losers is tragic
If Dominate circle prey from above that’s just his view from the casket
^ this was alright imo not the most vicious closer but serviceable

Overall thought there was a lot of good lines exchanged here, Dave was a little more flamboyant with concepts than I thought he would be. I guess the audience could always Google the reference, but I’m not sure how they’d feel about it. Overall Dom was just cleaner and hit harder so he gets my vote

V/Dom
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