[Rawn MD]

Hmm interesting

Adverse - I appreciate what you did here, and this sounds kind of funny coming from me, but some of your imagery in the beginning almost seems a little overboard, like not really forced, but redundant in a way… like you could have used those lines to say something else with deeper content. Truth is I wasn’t really feeling the first portion of the verse, but you kind of saved it with the Karma line at the end. However, I appreciate what you were doing by painting a picture and the setting, but it just felt kind of unnatural to me. After that portion though things improved a lot. You had like two or three places where you used a slant rhyme that was kind of iffy to me, but hearing your accent I’ll give you the benefit of the doubt… but yeah once you got into an active voice I enjoyed the verse. My only comment would be I’m not a fan of long windedness and sometimes it felt that way, maybe add some more internal rhymes, or exchange them for the vocab you use, which almost seemed superfluous at times. That’s just me though. I thought this was a solid drop, and despite my previous comment, you were able to hold a solid flow throughout.

Nigma - I enjoyed your verse… the flow was strong throughout, and I liked your use of alliteration a lot within some of your lines. However, some lines just didn’t jive right to me like “can’t catch the fists of pacifists” or “wits of basilisks” like they seemed more placed just to rhyme than for actual content bc pacifists don’t pass fists, and basilisk aren’t known for being smart, fast yes, but not smart… and even biblically speaking more insidious than knowledgable… bc the serpent egged Eve to eat, but it’s not known if the serpent ever did… idk… I hope you see what I am saying, or I maybe misinterpreting…idk. Also, the “infinite” end rhyme threw me, I wasn’t sure if u meant to write infinity, but then that kind of didn’t make sense, or it was meant to rhyme with the Internals of “a gift/recompense,” but that ind of wasn’t placed correctly to emphasize it, so it kind of through me for a loop there. But you ended strong AF

In total I think nigma prolly had the stronger flow and scheme, but adverse did more with the topic, came from a much more original direction, and his content was overall stronger. If Nigma did more with his direction, and used his metas better imo he could’ve taken this. In fact, my original reading I had Nigma taking this, but upon second read and more in-depth interpretation I have to give it to Adverse.

Vote - Adverse