[Master Rock]

Lgi had a pretty decent intro and story driven narrative which kept my attention and lured me in with the intro (nice staging). However their were several areas where the flow felt off key to me but honestly keep me intrigued with the scar...which lead me to pay attention for it's significance. The plot twist was wild but homoerotic at the same time (so it's wild either way). Halo on the other hand dropped his most fleshed out story driven narrative to date. He did not faulter one bit only on certain wording placements which can be deemed as subjective. He had color, foreshadowing (apparent if you must say), smell (especially when he states the bar "spirit of regret" that hit), cadence, etc. He took that dark ghost route which was cool, it seemed a little rushed at the end (meaning he could of fleshed out the haunting in the room a bit more by perhaps playing with words and what not.
Overall, white was outwritten by halo but by not much. White definitely got some skills in the back pocket but Halo is swinging an axe against a buther knife... giving it to Halo