[Rawn MD]

Eviction - Your verse flowed very clean, and that was its high point to me. I enjoyed the middle part of it’s content about capitalism, and profit driven happiness…. But I felt like the way you got there, and the way you left there could have been delivered a lot better. I felt like a good quarter of the content was more rhyme driven, than story worked. Plus, you totally threw me on your use of tenses. You start in third person, then go to first person, which keeps throughout. It just didn’t read right to me, and as much as I enjoyed your ending it seemed kind of incorporated just to have a twist, there was no allusion to aliens anywhere in your writing, nor even with word choice. In total I felt it flowed very well, but technically speaking there was a lot left wanting. Between the tenses, lack of word choice, and giving up content for rhyming… you could have done better imo.

NYC - your verse was overall much more cohesive than your opponents. The only thing I could remark on as possibly improving was that sometimes your transitioning from rhyme to rhyme could have maybe been more fluid, but this only happened a few times… and maybe u went like a syllable over here and there. But it didn’t detract from the overall verse. I felt your story to just be more engaging, the content to be more focused, and it was just a better read altogether for me.

Eviction came pretty solid. He prolly just edged NYC out on flow, but like I said I felt he sacrificed content for rhyme more often than he should have, and the jumping of tenses really messed his story’s delivery up for me. NYC just overpowered him with a more solid, cohesive verse, and his flow may have only been edged out, while NYC’s content was just more direct, and delivered better.

Good battle, but…

Vote - NYC