[Rawn MD]

Dope

Soule - I enjoyed your piece. The story was engaging, the flow was solid, and you incorporated parts of the picture in a way that was refreshingly original. The only flaw I could say was although vivid enough with detail, and truly fleshed out, too much attention might have been placed there and it worked against you in the end. Simply put, it needed more action to actually leave the reader (myself) remembering what you did with the story. Usually, I would say that the amount of detail you dropped, making it truly picturesque would be enough to win, but with who your opponents were you needed a little extra here, and factoring in flow and detail to a cool story that was fluent and fluid, just wasn’t enough to edge it bc in the end to me it was exactly that a cool story. You came in a close second my dood. Good verse though for sure.


Deadman - I gotta say I was kinda disappointed with your verse. Flow was money, and your word choice was on point. I just didn’t like the direction you went with the topic. It left me wanting more. I don’t know, it just didn’t do much for me in the end, which is odd bc you usually satisfy. Like I said the flow was money and the way you phrased the words you chose was dope. I just didn’t feel the verse in totality. You could have done so much more imo. You came in third.

Frank - I got to tell you, you almost costed yourself this with your lame (imo) repetitions. Half the first part of your verse ending with -ly got kind of annoying to me, your lucky you know how to use internals though. Your story was strong enough to muscle through until you did more. Soule may have packed more detail and truthfully, against my better thinking, stylistically had the better verse with literary devices and such. I just felt your story and direction a lot. I felt the action - which I feel is truly what edged this for you… it allowed your verse to be more captivating to the reader. The flow was on point and kind of followed pace with the story, making it more engaging to the reader, and although slightly cliche, but fittingly enough, I felt your ending the most. In total your verse left me just more satisfied than your opponents. But maybe it’s just me, but you truly did almost cost yourself this battle with the whole -ly scheme, it just got kind of annoying and seemed kind of cheap. Your story, and it’s direction saved your ass and allowed you to edge this out to me.

It was truly close between frank and soule

Came down to action verse detail, and franks verse just held my attention better and made me want to continue reading more…. And for that reason…

Vote - Frank