Halo. If I'm gonna nitpick ANYTHING, it'd be that jeans weren't actually a thing until the 1800s while pirates were around during the 17th and 18th century. Universe kinda did the same thing with energy drinks lol but it's really a small eye twitch rather than a verse destroying mistake. Overall this was really fucking dope. Had the Assassin's Creed Black Flags / Pirates of the Caribbean vibes mixed with Shakespeare. Really liked the pace and narration here. Really good piece, bro.
Adverse, I'm conflicted, boo. On one hand, that first half is REALLY fucking well written. Like, better than your piece last week. On the other hand, that second half, while comical af, really lost what you had going imho. I feel like you should stick to your niche and if your niche is depressing shit than fuck it write depressing shit lol. It was funny though and others may disagree with me. I just feel like you really could've contended here if you maintained what you had going before Donnie Wahlburg appeared.
Overall this was a dope battle and I really think the outcome is up in the air, but personally, this would've gone the other way if Adverse kept doing what he was doing while Halo remained consistent from start to finish. Really enjoyed this one fellas but...
vote Hal0
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