Adverse. I think this was cool. A bit elementary with the wording but it was a cohesive narrative. The ending a tid bit predictable but sall good. Maybe more internal multies though the flow didn't seem to struggle. RIP Ruby.
Rock, this was alright for what it was. Definitely appreciate you coming in last second, seven days to write 10-40 lines definitely isn't enough... Flow was alright for the most part. Felt the narrative was a bit abrupt. I dunno. To me it definitely feels like a piece just for the sake of showing. I've read your stuff before and this ain't it mate.
Vote Adverse for dropping a complete, more enjoyable piece.
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