My comment about the enter button wasn't because of your grammar, I believe that is the last of your worries, your lines are too long and read like a verse from HF/2005 longbar days, and not even a good rendition of it, as this is not a horrorcore battle unless I'm missing something, I am a fan of horrorcore but did not find anything quotable in even at that, I got mac the horrorcore thing might have been mac's fault but his verse was smoother and hit harder.
V/mac.
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