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Old 07-01-2022, 01:20 AM   #7
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Dave:
No one’s fooled when you flex. & For someone who spends so much time flowing
He’s the Alec Baldwin of text - if he ever actually gets props it’ll be mind blowing
^ I liked this, wording felt a little long winded but the general idea was dope

Second in the power rankings but sure, he oughtta be, yo
This the ‘stand alone’ league and that’s all he does at his comedy shows
^ this doesn’t hit for me..because stand up comedians usually standalone on stage? Or am I missing something?

He’s either ignored or they sighing and yo I applaud him for trying
But He could be on the bill at astroworld and wouldn’t have an audience dying
^ this was cool, I’m sure it’s been used before but first time I’ve seen it here

N If I call my shooters its fatality, they poppin this bitch
8k on his head send him to a new reality like oculus rift
^ this was insane to me but again could be overused

I saw your grocery list gimmick but really the reaction to shit was negligible
They weren’t impressed they just had to check that you had actually listed vegetables
^ think this is a deep cut... if you haven’t watched his battle you wouldn’t get it so you’re relying on that from your audience which is always tricky

& You can write what you want I’m not the type to just front
And I couldn’t Give a fuck if abortion’s illegal, I’ll still snatch the life from this cunt @Answer
^ this was okay. Expected to see a lot of these this week, even wrote one myself lol

Answer:
that dave kid's so sick til I pop up dabbin on em til the bingo hit
soon as my round drops it takes you down a few pegs like a plinko chip
^ alright this was a decent opener

veteran packing heat
pop a llama, like a pinata.. when the shit fall u better be ready to grab a piece
^ decent again, wasn’t crazy but did the job

hollows or metal jackets, my TEC can fit the bullet
hidden bookshelves.. something's inside a case that'll make an entrance when I pull it
^niceee liked the concept felt fresh

u act up & the p320 can adapt to that
deadbeat dad, if I tell you I'ma go get the sigs there ain't no coming back from that
^ cool one here again, good spin on gun bars

shotgun, let's get it poppin
good will hunting, the kid w/ a mop & a sweeper ready to work out any problem
^ alright cool

we know u don't fire rounds queer
bermuda triangle, come thru w/ the chopper & find out that shit don't fly around here
^ this was alright

Thought Answer was consistent throughout even though his whole verse was a gun bar (which is sort of his niche.) Dave was good and had some dope gun bars himself but felt he rushed/whiffed on a couple of concepts and that didn’t help him. Answer wins off being consistent (if not a little redundant IMO)

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