[Universe]

First of all... Fuck. Read both verses back to back and I have no idea who won. Eviction came with the superior technical skill and ability (no real grammar issues, btw) but his story suffered for it. Adverse, on the other hand, does what he does best and connects to the reader like no one else can on an emotional level, yet his technical flaws sometimes were shining through and not hidden in the darkness, like when he is at his best. So this is a tough one for me... But I'll re-read them again and see if I can determine a clear winner.

Eviction

As I said, you won the technical aspects fairly easily. You can be hit and miss with your bars but man when you're firing on all cylinders there's some super impressive stuff to be found. I struggled to really get a grasp of your story though and, although I enjoy the metaphorical hands-off narrative approach at times, this had way too many loose connections for me to give you credit for the subtle ones. I think when you connect with story beats its mostly by fluke and you just sort of roll with it and continue to evolve your story on the go. I think what you end up posting should actually just be your first draft... Start entirely again after writing it, with a direction starting to formulate, and see what you can do. This will allow you to drop more useful breadcrumbs for the reader and also tighten up your bars and solidify your narratives. Just a suggestion because you're right there... and even as a former champ you could reign for awhile if you brought it all together.

Highlights:

"I tried to be elusive, when there’s no truth, I thought deception would do the trick.
But Satin’s idea of what’s punitive’s lucrative, to the man behind the pseudonym.
I’m comfortable amid the fugitives tutelage, how can I lose grip when I’m used to it.
You outlive your usefulness when the shadow gets so close that it can be a crucifix"

Could've tightened up the flow with fewer syllables at the end there but this was nice.

"You might’ve guessed what lies ahead, a hallway with a trail of blood and spiderwebs,
Dreadful tales of love, like a flight of steps when you’re fat as fuck and fight for breath,

“Okay go ahead, try your best”

Good health will put your mind at rest, so put the cigarette down and sign the check.
You’ll wake up on the wrong side of the bed, diagnosed with an irreversible side effect,"

Dope.


Adverse:

You're literally like the polar opposite of Eviction. You can tell an emotionally charged narrative like few others and you have the ability, at any moment, to hit us with a line that makes us stop and go, "Whoa..." There's a depth to you that not many have or could ever hope to reach and it's a beautiful thing to read your work. What holds you back from greatness is your technical shortcomings mostly. You still have some awkward multi's and forced lines and sometimes your flow is suddenly long-winded for no reason, creating a jarring juxtaposition for the reader. You say all the important stuff... all the things that need to be said in your piece to get us towards the destination you want us to end up at... but sometimes you don't deliver it properly. For me, this is an easy fix and just requires more time spent proofreading your work and, perhaps most Importantly, experimenting with other options of HOW to deliver an idea, specifically what exact wording to use. When you get a great concept, write it three different ways... You'll be surprised what you find... you may actually find a way to fit that great idea into an already existing rhyme scheme, thus strengething its impact.

Highlights:

"So it’s come to this, for my sins is this my punishment?
I fumble the pen as I sit down at the desk and started writing ‘it goes something like this
My autobiography; unabridged"

Awkward, sure... but a cool intro.

"I breathed Black Plague over provinces making all the villagers fret
The one force that can stop the wars, lay heroes and villains to rest
You’ve probably already guessed my name, but the big reveal ain’t I’m death
It’s that I’m afflicted, I’m dying and don’t know what’s killing me yet
It’s a warm flutter that dances through the cold carcass i inhabit
Traveling through my veins and would invade the heart, if I had it"

Some better options exist for how to deliver these great lines, but even still... awesome section here.

"If a reaper dies, then what kind of creature could carry them home?
The irony, I was so busy taking lives that I forgot to cherish my own"

Line of the battle right here.

Alright, two read-throughs with breakdowns and I'm still unsure who won. I actually like both verses for entirely different reasons and it's tough to choose one over the other because it's either story with scattered technical ability or technical ability with a scattered story. What do you choose?

In the end I've always sided with a stronger story so I'll continue that trend here. If there was ever a place for a REAL tie, this would be it. But no one wants those... right?

Vote: Adverse by a decimal point.