I thought Frank’s best moments operated at an upper echelon of Flow, swagger and unique delivery as usual. The multie syllabic rhyme scene back to back to back to back about the conductor being a genius etc was my favorite part of both verses. I’m not sure how a train would go from Uranus to the moon etc that would require rockets but let’s just explain that away as a rocket train. That still doesn’t work because dude is dressed for work today not a 3 month voyage to Pluto. Anyways, weird shit like aliens and flat earth, I feel like you might’ve focused a bit too much on flow and a fireworks display of rhyme scheme that the story itself grew increasingly convoluted and nonsensical. Either way, I enjoyed the verse for what it was.
Mike loved the story and scheme for what it was but let’s be real there’s some loopy shit here. You’re in space…on the moon, presumably with the ability to mine asteroids, Earth is in need of minerals!! So instead of mining trillions of pounds of iron, zinc, platinum, I don’t know moonrocks, gold, whatever the fuck else is out there, let’s… mine hundreds of babies on the moon and lose millions of dollars by sending the minerals of babies back to earth from the moon?? Lol. Ok well that aside, let’s do some suspension of disbelief (like I had to with Frank) and assume these are like, super babies. You know I always dig the neo-noir anti mega corporation vibe, brother. Then you got the dude killing himself everyday, or maybe not everyday, fucking a robot whore, & they’ll just clone him to keep killing babies?
I sound critical bc it’s a champ match & I expect greatness out of u two
As a stand-alone I’d probably prefer franks, but for a more topically relevant piece which hit the topic a little bit more realistically, though both were very unrealistic, mvgt mike wrecka. I get it, sci fi prompts are hard. Next time y’all should focus a bit more on realism in lieu of creativity, I felt like you both were hindered by the “too many options” aspect of sci fi topical prompts
V/ MW
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