Frank with a typical frank verse with the same rhyme. Gets weird after reading so many like it. Almost gets boring really, like reading prose. Lots of forced words but your story was dope and thats all that matters in the end.
The day came when Mieke came face to face with the grazing fangs of the locust, before it aviated away—
Mieke finally understood the insect and no longer felt jaded with hate: she too felt too dazed to escape—
Very good, sir. Solid.
Eviction seems at a loss from the get-go. The subject and baseline of your story just did not seem too exciting at all but you ran with it anyway. You came too basic to match up with francis, as far as your vocab, metas etc. Your ending was dope but leading up to it was not, work on that.
V. Dank i mean frank
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