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Old 06-10-2022, 07:17 PM   #7
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@Frank, another longbar guy here, I still find the panning annoying I dont get it, rhymes was repetitive at times especially went you got to the fall/stall schems, even rhyming stall a few times, you really hitting on the stall topic I just wish you wouldn't have rhymed it so many times, other than that this was a solid piece.

@brokenhalo - def one of your better verses this season, loved the aliteration in the beggining around the @prick her pale skin / pins saying that 5 times fast is slick, I also would have went with a padden room or maybe an interregation room, you had a long piece to but it didn't ever have a dull moment.

Alot of people would see this battle and run away because the pieces are long, but it's worth the read, broken had the best verse I read from him, frank killed it with the rhyming as usual, I want to say frank had the better story if you was to torcher me for a vote, I would give it to frank.

close one tho but for now v/ frank
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