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Old 06-08-2022, 10:09 PM   #5
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This verse was ill as fuck. Some bars didn’t belong (cloaks & swords & Ethiopian boats or something…lol what?). But other than that it made me think, was cryptic but had enough depth and coherence to be comprehensible, and the flow was nasty.

Swimming when I should be pacing instead was a SICK transitional line, captures the dream image nicely, b. Comforter and thread line, nice nuance.

Ending was cryptic Pretty cool, I interpreted it personally as information overload and the need for zen to see a bird’s eye perspective

I was feeling most of this verse, the transition from fucking your wife to seeing cows on phones was a bit abrupt but I was still feeling the verse a lot.

Overall 8.1/10 including rust factor
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