adverse:
loved this couplet:
Wait wait...perhaps I’m reading way too much into this
You want me to be around, but only hold me when it’s convenient?
great use of topic, i dont know if you needed to reinforce it but it hit hard none the less.. and the revelation of what you are after such a deep and emotional writers voice "the dictionary" really hit home son.. ish was dope structure wise - yeah all in all top piece..
eviction:
loved these bars:
I have to get passed their narrow-minded views so I can show off the new wallet.
“You don’t deserve to be here, your roots are too bucolic, so who profits?
You want a dude who’s not this, rude and obnoxious, that zooms through topics,
That rises above the bottomless pit, and doesn’t complain about a few losses”
the personal factor was right up there and it was street smart but as a whole on delivery was a bit immature then the last stanza your brought it home from being like an age 4/7 to 7/8 which is a pass in my books.. i loved the dilemma of you or your characters main voice "provincial is sacrilege" hit hard from this point may have even swung you the win i dont know yet lets see.. gl dope
dominate:
very pretty dude, the colours used were so touching and moving with the subtle soft powdery relations and it went on for bar to bar and i think if you had a little more of that even though you top knotched it it would have really shoned this piece to where it wouldnt even be considered a close match hehe.. but anyways structure wise cool ending dope.. general development and story delivery all top knotch.. ill give it a 7/10.. piece..
vote = dominance
it was a pretty cool champ match worth the wait and worth the title.. dom just pulled it out with is pretty colours.. all in all dope xoxo gl guys
i can taste it
