[Adonis]

Dom - First off, keep my name out your mouth, we aint cool like that lol. Started off slow because I think that first bar could have been worded better for flows sake, but, it's a nice set up in scenery. Then you did the "Green and gold and tan" through me off as well, just too many ands really. I liked "Closed in to close it's existence" however, and actually the imagery in the finding of the deer was actually really really nice. Safe to say this is where you started gaining steam. "Solace of the forests Grandeur" is a nice touch and helped really paint an emotion almost for Gaston. It sort of played to his concededness if you will, but also built up the character on the first read. So I enjoyed the read as far as the writing itself goes, you even painted Gaston nicely, almost like an Anti-Hero knowing who he is, but you made him seem like a good guy of sorts early on. From him second guessing or thinking exestenatially on things, pondering life. I mean, in my head I dont envision the evil people doing this you know? In any case, as far as the actual story, it was cool in a sense, but also stale in another sense because it just wasn't new. You had an outline of a story previously written, which I have actually done before and fell flat writing of the Illiad here. So while the writing itselt was really good, and even the story telling, at some point after that first read it began losing luster quite quickly. But, again, nothing to truly complain about in terms of actualy writing abilities.

Eviction - A straight to story to me of a guy struggling to survive, then climbs his way up the corporate ladder to remedy all the reasons he was not happy, only to find, he is still not happy. Can't say this is a fresh concept as It's been plenty of times, but, from the top layer I actually think you are talking about yourself in terms of this league. Now I could be wishfully thinking and completely missing the mark, but, I'll assume I'm correct. In any case, the story was cool, but sort of dragged on. Nothing really set this aside from the others done like this, there was no flip on the story line or eye popping concept. In the end, it just read as a face value read with some underlying meaning, but never truly captivated my full attention on a level in which forced me to delve deep into the line by line meaning. I read it twice, and each time I sort of started and ended, didn't trule hate or truly love any one thing about it. Sorry if that comes out mean, but I was told last week by another competitor to be more honest and help us all improve, so I will say I think some of the lines just missed the mark. Example: "Like the edible arrangements they sent to my office, were laced with laxatives." Either the coma is not needed or the sentence just seems off to me, as if it's missing some words. Now this is a small detail, however this is a champ match, and that could be the difference in the crown or not. IDK, it's not that I didn't like the read, because it was cool, just not what I would expect from a champ match.

Adverse - So that first stanza I kind of get the vibe of youre writing about yourself trying to write? You spoke of pens and ink and tattoos, so I could be far off of course, but thats how I took it. Then you switched into actually talking from the dictionaries perspective, which to me is a hell of a fresh idea. I think you could have expanded on that concept alone and fleshed something out, but alas, this verse read as a bit underwhelming, as if you were not inspired to go full force. This was a fun read simply because the concept is a fresh take to me. The actual reading or storytelling was cool, definetaly you executed concept, but if I'm being honest, IMO I just think it fell a bit flat. it's not a bad read to say the least, but as I said to eviction, in a champ match I just expected more and thus, vote as such, with higher expectations and felt they just weren't met here. I will say I just read it a third time, and I didn't pick up on the fact that the first two stanzas you are in fact the book being made via ink being scribed and binding of the spine etc. So, this leaves me with enjoying the concept a hell of a lot more to be honest.

Vote - Of the three two I enjoyed much more, so I will talk about them here. Dom had a narrative that was clean and to the point. Very descrptive with concise flow rittled throughout. Meanwhile Adverse had a concept piece that still had narrative traits, but was far more concept driven than anything. He had less in terms of mechanics, however the writing itself came off very clean in reading it, no hiccups and no "try hard" rhymes, just straight laced and to the point, doing it's job completely. While I loved his concept and it's execution, I felt he couldve spiced it up a notch utilizing IDK, alliteraltion sprinkled in, or multis galore every so often. On the other hand, while I loved all the flair in Doms from the scenery to the hunting to the character build up, I just felt his story lacked for the simple reason he did not create it, just sort of built upon the already laid foundation. So this is a very difficult vote for me as I do honestly have you rather even in my head. So, i'm gonna have to go with my gut.

v/ Adverse

When all is said and done, the concept alone is what will last the longest in my mind. Meaning, I don't think I'll remember a story about Belle and Gaston in a few months, but I can guarantee while writing in the future I will some how think of something similar to what Adverse did here, and have to scrap that idea because it was his first. Great battle, ALL THREE OF YOU. I don't want to take away anything from Eviction as you did your thing as well bro. Cheers!!