[Adonis]

Candy - the writers voice is strong, like even while reading Nigger it all still sounded so somber in my mind. But that's about my only true compliment. I was lost, felt like you skipped around too much. You never focused to long on anything, felt a little like click bate in writing form if you will, I guess that's shock value. You really do need to write your 100 lines the first day topics posted, but not post. Come back to it, find what you're trying to say, and let it simmer or flower.

Franker - I missed you guy, some fine writing here, I'm already inspired to write for next week, thank you. Loved the topic flip, even though I don't know if it's a flip if you took it literal, but none the less a fresh flip. Fine wording and nuanced flow scattered and smattered about like so. Enjoyed thoroughly even if common rhymes were used, you still packed them in. Good imagery, especially in opening explaining the rains drops if you will. Glad you're back, I do hope you stick around

V / Frank

The better written verse thematically, in execution and in polish.