This was BOTW imo, I thought both of you had some really dope moments. Both flexed a real nice skill set of flow, vocab, dialogue, and various literary devices that some others in the league just don’t have, making this a tough vote. As I read adverse’s verse, I really got into it in the middle. I think that section engaged me more than any part in either verse, but I’ll admit I wasn’t really feeling the ending. Surprise twists are hit or miss, in this case I felt a bit of letdown. I had a few question marks in my head like, if he’s really dying, why did he get shot if it was an acid trip and he thought he was a ronin? And the girl turns out to be a demon? Seems like a couple plot holes there brother, I would have preferred you just straight up kept the story of a ronin without the demon acid trip invasion, would’ve voted for you in that case.
Universe was a cool humorous verse. There was a lot of TV references that seemed random that I wasn’t feeling too much, just. Bit too gimmicky for my tastes, but the flow and everything was dope. The Truman show reference was cool but then I felt like you did too much with the twist after that, got a little weird with him dying after she dies and all that. Overall I enjoyed the verse but I think despite BOTW status both you and eviction tried to do a little too much with the twist ending instead of writing to your high level abilties and cleaning up the story a bit without too many detours. Either way, thought you did enough to win this, I gotta give you the edge because eviction’s ending threw me off a little bit mroe than yours, while the rest of both verses had some elite skill flashes, but both fell short of their true potential here imo. Good battle either way.
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