Eviction you had some cool moments and bars but at times it seems like you’re not developing the story, like it’s observation after observation which can be a chore to read through. At the beginning I thought it was about a serial killer, turns out it’s some dude who’s missing his devilish wife, with a kind of weak tie in to vulture feces which I had completely forgotten about from the first stanza. I don’t know man, I liked your verse from the other week alot more. I think It’d be better if you went for more action than description.
Dom pretty cool verse. I thought it had a nice development, nice clean progression and cool flow. Alcoholic dude, wife leaves him, he dies. Like I said, thought it was pretty cool, would have liked to see a bit more on why he was an alcoholic maybe if you had more time, that might have been a nice extra layer, but I thought you did enough with flow, delivery and concept to take it here
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