Timeless
First, and foremost, I loved your end rhymes. Nothing read forced or out of place. None of them were super complicated or complex, but I really enjoyed how they all fit perfectly together like pieces of a puzzle. I read your verse out load and it had a real rhythmic feel to it. Dope stuff. As for the actual subject matter…well…I know it had something to do with the primordial deities of Ancient Greek mythology. I’m familiar with the story of Gaia (Mother Earth), and her husband Uranus (Sky), and of course their offspring Cronus (Father Time), but how they all fit together in your rendition of events is a bit ambiguous to me. However, I really enjoyed the interplay between Father Time and Brother Death.
NYCSPITZ
I thought your story was super entertaining and very well written from beginning to end. The comedy alone was enough to win most battles. With that said, I remember popping shroom back in the day, and while tripping, I experienced what seemed to be at time, my own death. Coincidently, that experience was almost identical to what you described in your final six lines. And after connecting with your verse on that level, I find it pretty hard to vote against you here.
Highly entertaining battle. Props to both.
Vote — NYCSPITZ
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