universe:
Whoever said art is dead?
the groundhoug day/rain line was dope also dope was this: "The only things not invented here are reasons and motives", your fucken asylum stanza was off the chain.. holy shit "angel corpse that won't float..." i loved that it was a story about being in someone elses post because of translation.. the quotes were off the hook.. in general the open few bars were fire and then it was like the next half cool but it seemed it got extinguished then bamm that asylum part bust out and you just tore the reader pieces lol.. nice job
adverse:
i like your take on the rain very subtly, very poetic.. the revenge story was dope to i was interested the whole tale.. i think structure wise this was infinitely tighter then uni's by his being soo loosely based and spreading in such a vast direction even though yours did to it was just tighter.. vocab hot, charcaters hot - plot the was i read out all good.. top piece xoxo
vote = universe
i havent read much like this so though were 100% original unis just one uped it.. gl yall
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