brokenhal0:
i love the ending.. the death encounter was like they were never going to cross then at the end they pop up .. and lilly being the main character was developed i fell in love with her.. the poetic creativity is all up my alley.. the vocab was dope.. thanks flow and structure cool very loose which by normal standards was cool to me but in general is held as a negative..
Eviction:
i love the character was drinkable.. i loved it like a little pallet of crayon oils sprayed in such a soft story.. much like halos it was loose but yours was more in a general sense strong.. so you had the elements of the people looking from outside eyes which gets an instant point.. structure was dope.. flow dope.. all in all it was pretty damn good..
vote = eviction
better told molded story.. good luck guys
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